What you did, extrapolating from an original story that was never intended to be more than a brief snippet, was extraordinary. This one would be in the running for best story of the entire remix. The structure, the application of the structure, the presentation of the various personalities, all ring true and work beautifully.
Willow’s confident, dismissive ‘ruling’ on Dawn’s tentative wonderings about herself … does she even realize her mother’s voice is coming out of her mouth? Tara showing the best of the qualities people most admired in her: loving, supportive, offering insight and wisdom without attempting to impose her own viewpoint; does she even realize just how deep her particular type of strength runs?
And Dawn, smart enough to recognize that the passion of a moment isn’t all there is to reality, while still being wholly caught up in that passion.
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Date: 2013-07-04 03:36 am (UTC)Willow’s confident, dismissive ‘ruling’ on Dawn’s tentative wonderings about herself … does she even realize her mother’s voice is coming out of her mouth? Tara showing the best of the qualities people most admired in her: loving, supportive, offering insight and wisdom without attempting to impose her own viewpoint; does she even realize just how deep her particular type of strength runs?
And Dawn, smart enough to recognize that the passion of a moment isn’t all there is to reality, while still being wholly caught up in that passion.
Okay, I like this one a lot. Sue me.